Talk:First Battle of the Stronghold

---

This article was added to Brilliant prose on December 30, 2003.

Discussion from Wikipedia:Brilliant prose candidates

• First Battle of the Stronghold - My first attempt to flesh out some of the events of the Indian Wars, and I think it turned out pretty well. Gentgeen 14:54, 15 Dec 2003 (UTC)
  • Seconded. Good topic, well-done, nice use of pix. -- BCorr ¤ Брайен 17:01, 15 Dec 2003 (UTC)
  • Very well-written, nice-looking and complete. However, before it becomes 'brilliant prose' it needs a full set of references in a ==References== section and a ==Further reading== section for good books on the subject. The lead paragraph also needs to be a short summary of the entire article. The reason this is important is because Wikipedia is an encyclopedia of encyclopedias and one of those encyclopedias is a concise one. Having a comprehensive lead paragraph(s) accomplishes this (not too long, however). See news style. The photo caption is also wrong; the Army fortifications in the photo are inside the Stronghold and, IIRC, were built after the second battle when the Army took the Stronghold over. I suggest replacing that photo with others that show Modoc-built defensive or offensive positions (or even caves they were living-in). --mav 01:10, 17 Dec 2003 (UTC)
    • Thanks mav, I've expanded the intro paragraph, added refrences, and replaced the offending pic with another one (also yours) showing Captain Jack's cave, although I liked the first, just to show the rough terrain. Gentgeen 11:55, 17 Dec 2003 (UTC)
      • Looks real good! I withdraw my objection. --mav

Not really FA

This needs a map, wikificaton of the second section (ilinks), expantion and inline citations. Otherwise this is headign towards FARC...--Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus ^Talk 17:21, 11 May 2006 (UTC)

External links modified

Hello fellow Wikipedians,

I have just modified one external link on First Battle of the Stronghold. Please take a moment to review my edit. If you have any questions, or need the bot to ignore the links, or the page altogether, please visit this simple FaQ for additional information. I made the following changes:

• Added archive https://web.archive.org/web/20090709065127/http://www.techgnosis.com/chunkshow-single.php?chunk=chunkfrom-2008-09-25-1733-0.txt to http://www.techgnosis.com/chunkshow-single.php?chunk=chunkfrom-2008-09-25-1733-0.txt

When you have finished reviewing my changes, you may follow the instructions on the template below to fix any issues with the URLs.

This message was posted before February 2018. After February 2018, "External links modified" talk page sections are no longer generated or monitored by InternetArchiveBot. No special action is required regarding these talk page notices, other than regular verification using the archive tool instructions below. Editors have permission to delete these "External links modified" talk page sections if they want to de-clutter talk pages, but see the RfC before doing mass systematic removals. This message is updated dynamically through the template {{source check}} (last update: 5 June 2024).

• If you have discovered URLs which were erroneously considered dead by the bot, you can report them with this tool.
• If you found an error with any archives or the URLs themselves, you can fix them with this tool.

Cheers.—InternetArchiveBot (Report bug) 10:31, 1 October 2017 (UTC)